So I have no doubt in my mind that your story has potential. I am quite curious as to where you are leading us. This is your first episode and you deserve the benefit of the doubt. You'll improve with each consecutive episode...
But here's what need to improve. You should get voice actors rather than that computer generated voice. It's tacked on and completely sucks one out of the video. And the dialogue... I'm assuming English is your second language? You should have an English speaking colleague review your lines for you and correct your grammar. It seriously detracts from the video.
The animation feels a little stiff... But it's your first video. You will inevitably improve.
In a nutshell, there's potential. But the audio needs to be addressed.
Looking forward to your next video so we can see your improvement!